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Kenn Reff's avatar

Great start. Will be reading the next chapter. A few minor comments. Don’t use the word ground in a ship- use floor, surface, or some other variant, it threw me out of the room for a moment.

Without knowing the background of each individual, I would think the system would wake the medical personnel first, to have them ready to assist the others when they later awoke. The system would probably work better if each was awakened individually, in case there was a medical emergency. The captain seemed unconcerned that his crew were all lying on the floor in various states if distress, and just calmly read a report. Seems like he would be more concerned.

Just some thoughts I had. On to reading the next Chapter!

Ace McAlpine's avatar

Such a compelling entrance into the story ☺️ And its exciting your adding an element if your medical studies into the story. I love scifi but wouldnt even know where to start with futuristic mediceine! Looking forward to the next chapter 📖

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